Many people believe that social networking sites *such as Facebook)have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Presently, there is numerous social network including
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and
facebook
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, which could have several cons.
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my
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perspective
, I agree with
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statement as it could affect
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both
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and humanity. One of the negative effects on humanity is fake news or fake knowledge from
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as it is so easy to post something online with no evidence to
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.
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, the owner of the post might believe that it is just a joke, but some individuals might
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with
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thier
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their
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a
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affect
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in the
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future.
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, there might be a normal person
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about the herb on Facebook with no
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as they just think out of
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, and one person found it and believed it so they chose to take that herb
instead
of seeing a doctor.
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, every single
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of social media
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a share botton so it
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spread to the whole planet, which
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to spread
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fake news easily too. There is might from a small country in Asia but suddenly share to
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Europe
with no clue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • detriment
  • isolated
  • face-to-face interaction
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • comparison
  • jealousy
  • mental health
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • addiction
  • positive aspects
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