Some people believe that nowadays too much money is being spent on weddings and birthdays. Why do you think it is happening? What can be done to improve the situation?

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Recently, many people spending
money
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birthdays
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weddings
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. I
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believe
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birthday
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and
weddings
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memories because
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can't buy happiness
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others
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not spending
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for special occasions like
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weddings
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and
birthdays
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my views
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positive and
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, will lead to
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conclusion.
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, when you are celebrating your
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your
weddings
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it
give
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you happiness. That kind of joy you experience is much grateful
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thankful for the added life.
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, a kind of
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that
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can't buy.
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, the memorable moments of your life
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in the
future
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to
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your friends and families.
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, the events that happen
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your life
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recorded
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you will watch
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the
future
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, if you don't have
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then
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no need to spend
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your
bornday
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birthday
and
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weddings
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days. Sometimes
all
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individuals
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no
money
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to spend
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their
birthdays
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and
weddings
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.
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, they are
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practical
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the penny.
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, it will save for the
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of their family
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in education. In conclusion, spending
money
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in
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birthday
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birthdays
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and
weddings
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it
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can give joy as
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well
as creating memories.
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,
the
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other people
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saving for their
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future
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