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The graph below Shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The graph below Shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The graph
illustates
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illustrates
 shapes were closed and opened during the period, from 2011 to 2018 in a particular country.
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, both indicators closed under the opening rate and
openings
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 dramatically reduced.
Openings
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kiked
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kicked
 off from 8500 and took a nose down in
an
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a
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year
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 and reached around 4000 in 2012. Next two years it gradually increased and
touch
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touched
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 above 6000,
next
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the next
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year
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 it
fel
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fell
down
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apply
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again and reached
again
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apply
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4000 in 2015. When it comes to closing of shops, it started near 6500
at
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in
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initial
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the initial
an initial
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year
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 and fluctuated for
next
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the next
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 3 years and
remain
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remained
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 around
same
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the same
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 as
starting
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a starting
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 point.
Although
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,
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apply
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 it took
nose
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a nose
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 dive and touched
below1000
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below
, it skyrocketed
next
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the next
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year
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 and reached above 5000 And it
remain
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remained
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 for
final
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the final
a final
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year
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.
Openings
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was
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apply
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reached 3000 in 2018 and it was the lowest of
openings
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words openings, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • number
  • shops
  • closed
  • opened
  • country
  • 2011
  • 2018
  • trend
  • downward trend
  • significantly
  • higher
  • steady decrease
  • relatively stable
  • reached
  • lowest point
  • slightly increased
  • gradual increase
  • surpassed
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