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With a fast pace of modern life, more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meal. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

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In the rushed world of people nowadays, there is more interest in consuming junk
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. Personally, I opine that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. On one hand,
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, it couldn’t be denied that one of the most obvious benefits of fast food is saving time. The proper meal alone cannot serve the needs of the rushed society.
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, because fast food restaurants, in
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 modern age
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, can be easily found on the streets,
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 leads to more convenience in our everyday lives.
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, the location of those restaurants always comes with parking spaces
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 the drive-thru service,
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 allows life to be even more comfortable.
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, compared to the original cooking process, people can waste only 2 minutes for a very quick meal at Mcdonalds'.
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, despite more time earned for
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 activities, one’s health can get worse and worse by consuming it since most ingredients of
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 kind of meals mostly contain unhealthy materials.
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, there is a lot of sugar in cereal compared to a common meal,
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 you can find more protein in a dish of a steak than in a Fish burger.
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, taking
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 materials in the long run can cause a number of health problems. That might be the reason why people in the modern age get sick more than they used to be.
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 fast food can lead society to spend less time and cause more convenience, it can come with several health issues.
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