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The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
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This
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 line graph provides information regarding the number of three kinds of crimes in Newport
city
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 between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, except for
Burglary
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, the figures
of
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for
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 Car Theft and
Robbery
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 had barely changed. The numbers remained relatively more stable than
Burglary
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.
However
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, as mentioned,
Burglary
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 went through the most rapid change among the factors, which dipped
quikely
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quickly
. To be specific, in the case of
Burglary
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, it
rised
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rose
rises
 to around 3700 in 2003, but after that, it
continiuously
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continuously
 shrinked rapidly, recoreded 1200 in 2008. And it stayed at between 1000 and 1500,
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, the rest of
two
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the two
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 factors which had shown significant changes, differ in
a
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apply
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view of how many
crime
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crimes
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occured
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occurred
in
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on
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 average.
First,
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Car Theft mostly doubled than
Robbery
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, but it had shown more frequent shifts than
Robbery
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, which was between 2000 and 2900.
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,
Robbery
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 stayed at around 500 and over.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recorded
  • trends
  • criminal activity
  • categories
  • theft
  • assault
  • vandalism
  • graph
  • x-axis
  • y-axis
  • number of crimes
  • visual representation
  • changes
  • crime rates
  • fluctuating pattern
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