Marketers should not be allowed to target children in their advertisements. Would you agree or disagree with this statement?
In the marketing
intdustrials
some Correct your spelling
industrials
industries
people
believe that advertisement
should not be able to targeting
on Change the verb
target
youngers
generations. Personally speaking, I think that targeting Correct your spelling
younger
children
in advertisement
may result Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
as
lower income in economic status because many Change preposition
in
children
are still depending on their parents
. In contrast
, parents
can decide more because they are grown up, so advertising older age group may be more efficient.
Certainly, advertisement
that are made to attract Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
children
and younger people
were
often toys and Wrong verb form
are
cloth
. Correct your spelling
clothes
Furthermore
, some of those things
cost higher, as
a result, Correct word choice
and as
children
themselve
are unable to earn them so they ask their Correct your spelling
themselves
parents
. Many people
have different status
in Fix the agreement mistake
statuses
money
, since that
those Correct word choice
apply
that
have less Correct pronoun usage
who
money
will not spend them
buying unreasonable Correct pronoun usage
it
things
for their children
but they
will rather buy reliable Correct pronoun usage
apply
things
, so marketing advertisement
that Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
target
children
may be the cause of decreasing income in companies.
According to
me, I believe that advertising older
Change preposition
to older
aspect
of Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
people
would profit more id
marketers Correct your spelling
if
target
them. SinceWrong verb form
targeted
,
grownups Remove the comma
apply
lived
longer than Wrong verb form
live
childrens
they have more experience in a wider view of the world and especially their health concerns. For Correct your spelling
children
instant
, if Add an article
an instant
a
Change the article
an
advertisement
of
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for
a
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apply
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helps Change the capitalization
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cured
several knees Wrong verb form
cure
problem
, Change to a plural noun
problems
ofcourse
my grandma would buy it immediately without thinking. Correct your spelling
of course
Moreover
, they
are a variety kinds of Correct pronoun usage
there
advertisement
that are connected to Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
parents
more than their youngs
Correct your spelling
young
such
as,
cooking equipment, reading books, and older clourfull design Remove the comma
apply
cloth
, since they work for their Correct your spelling
clothes
money
, when buying those stuff they can just make an
decision without asking other because they earn it.
In conclusion, some Change the article
a
people
think that advertisement
should not target
to
kids but should rather Change preposition
apply
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
target
to
older groups of Change preposition
apply
people
, which I agree because
I believe that targeting older generations are more reliable because they have the Change preposition
with because
money
they earn, despite, targeting kids some of them are still unready to buy things
on their own.Submitted by thanapat1229 on
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