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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human’s life. Discuss both views and give your opinion – Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 era, more and more people tend to ignore the different knowledge from the past, they think that it has no value to add to our present
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. But some claim that history may
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 and that we can learn a lot from the past, which can help us
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 our present. I think that the
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 view is the correct one, I will elaborate on my perspective in the coming
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. On the one hand, some may think that things coming from the
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previous
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 is old
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, in agriculture, there was
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 machine that did not
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 the past so we cannot learn a lot from the previous
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 and the routes that were used
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 is not suitable nowadays.
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information
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, new techniques developed upon the past one. In fact, we try to
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, we can learn a lot from the previous
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 we can refine
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 and improve our life's quality.
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task response
Ensure that your essay directly addresses the prompt and fully discusses both views.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas logically and present a clear introduction and conclusion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and vary your word choice.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your grammar and sentence structure to enhance clarity.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lessons
  • mistakes
  • insights
  • human behavior
  • cultural diversity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • distorted
  • present-focused
  • personal development
  • societal development
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