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Some people argue that teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them. Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #abilities #treatment
Nowadays, Some people believe that educating
children
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 unlike abilities together
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advantages
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 all of them,
while
 others think that kids should be
tuaght
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taught
 differently based on their
intelligent
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intelligence
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 with special treatment given. Personally speaking, it would be more
benefitials
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beneficial
 in a wider aspect of
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education
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 and innovations if intelligent
children
group
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 together as they have the same
interest
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interests
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, and may improve the world in the future. In current days, methods of teaching
has
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 improved,
moreover
, one of the ways it has been done was by putting different
children
 in
learning
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group
. Many
childrens
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children
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 have different
intelligent
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intelligence
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 through
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the educational
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 field.
For instance
, doing a
group
 project, grouping
smartest
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the smartest
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kid
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kids
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 with
ones
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the ones
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 that are not really smart may increase teamwork skills and improve
friendship
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friendships
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 as they need to help each other,
furthermore
, the
one
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ones
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 with
fewer
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less
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 knowledge may
asked
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 for help and learn
by
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 their smarter teammates and
this
 will
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 an increasing number in
children
be
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to be
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 smarter in the future. On the other, grouping
children
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 on the same intelligence helps save time for teachers as they can finish their work and understand
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 rapidly than others. Since
,
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 a
group
 of
same
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the same
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 interested
children
 stays together, they can produce
a
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unexpected work.
Moreover
, the relationship in the
group
 would lead to big
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success
 in the broader
industrials
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 as they go
along with
 common likes , the efficiency
while
 working will increase and may result
as
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in
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 amazing research or projects to the world.
Additionally
,
teacher
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teachers
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 will spend less time as they teach those kids,
due to
 the fast learning and easier understanding they do.
As a result
 , more opportunities will be given to them and they can explore more by
themselve
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themselves
. In conclusion, mixing different kinds of
children
 with different skills, may
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benefit
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benefits
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them by
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by
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them by
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 helping each other individuals and
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giving
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give
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 them inspiration. Despite that, grouping
same
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the same
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 intelligence kids
result
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results
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 better in
the
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long term
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 development
,
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and, moreover
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moreover
, less
time consuming
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while
 learning as all of them are fast in understanding.
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