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The map below is of the town og Garlsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town og Garlsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The given map depicts two sides where a new brand supermarket is
been planning
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being planned
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 to
built
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be built
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that from the map, one possible place, S1,
locates
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is located
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 coutryside,
whereas
 other
area
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areas
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 places in the city centre. Looking more closely at S1, which
locates
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is located
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the
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on the
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 east side of the industrial
area
,
is
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it has
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 been
planning
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planned
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 to
construct
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be constructed
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 between a railway and a main road.
Additionally
,
this
area
have
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has
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12
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a 12
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 km distance
with
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from
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 the city of Hindon where
10.000
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10,000
 people live. Turning to the other land, which is been thinking on
build
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the build
a build
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 in the city
center
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centre
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 and surrounding with
industrial
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the industrial
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area
, is been
designnig
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designing
 with
a
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apply
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railway access that across the supermarket.
Moreover
, the S2
area
 has
far away
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apply
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two
states
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faraway states
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, Bransdon and Cranston which have 15.000 and 29.000
population
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populations
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, respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessibility
  • Residential area
  • Commercial development
  • Traffic flow
  • Local employment
  • Economic impact
  • Ecological footprint
  • Congestion
  • Town expansion
  • Urban planning
  • Outskirts
  • Feasibility
  • Sustainability
  • Demographics
  • Necessities
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