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some people think that to be successful,you need to get in university education wheras otgees say it is not true . discusa both views and hive your opinion

#people #university #education #wheras #otgees #discusa #hive
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high school
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look for him life, actually the first type of
people
 they focus on their education career ,
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their
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people
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 with a high school diploma .
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 of
people
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support the completion of university
studies
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people
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is a pass in
this
 life, because they have a strong certificate accepted by all jobs when he needs or if they needed open a marketing project
,
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if you ask
whe
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when
why
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 will say they have a nice minded .
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 some
people
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don't agree with the first
opinion
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, they have
freedom
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 to have their
opinion
 .
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they
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 opinions no one will be against their
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university
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 degree it's not important because four wasted years of your life in which you can achieve many things,
such
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 a small shop or any home project. Conclusion
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 to studies, research has said you
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college
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 degree , To be a dependable person , or
helpfull
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help
 yourself
also
 your family ,
your
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 children they need a salary for
a
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school . Everything's in
this
 moment
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 on your educational certificate , In my
opinion
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people
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college
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