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Many people use distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, the Internet, etc.) to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending college or university. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In our world,there are a lot of good and bad things . these things affect our lives . technology is one of these things . some individuals use new methods to learn
while
 others believe the old styles are better .
this
 essay agrees that technology is beneficial.
this
 essay will argue both points of view. First of all , the new material helps students to understand the subject. To explain that ,when schoolers search for some information and study they need someone to explain that to them .
for example
 , my sister studies hard exercises and even the internet
such
 as YouTube helps her to get high scores.
in addition
 , automation helps the teacher to teach teenagers. To illustrate , some studies or research proved that 70% of tutors use new technology to teach students online
such
 as Zoom. By way of conclusion , after a detailed analysis of both points of view, I believe that machinery is beneficial and helps students .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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