You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
There are the
number
of individuals that enunciates people's health
is strongly affected by living in large cities
. To some extent, this
statement can be true because of the pollution
, unhealthy lifestyle that is
practised in cities
and increased the stress level. Therefore
, this
can be dangerous for people living cities
. This
is present in detail with some relevant examples.
To commence with, the major problem to live in the cities
is the pollution
. There are large number
of population living in cities
and there are huge number
of cars, industries and different kind of appliances that can pollute the nature. Due to
this
kind of development, air quality index is becoming poorer by each passing day. For example
: there is an university that did there research and published an article according to
which pollution
help in decreasing the humans life by 20 years. Therefore
, pollution
in the cities
needs to be controlled.
Secondly
, cities
lifestyle also
impact the mankind health
. For instance
: number
of people are there in cities
who sleeps late, which have a huge impact on their circadian rhythm, also
, in recent years, it has been seen that persons are now more involved in drinking alcohols, which can lead to number
of health
diseases.
Further
in addition
, cities
are mostly focused on their development, which leads to stress in their lifes. Let's assume, this
kind of stressful life also
causes number
of diseases such
as obesity, diabetes, etc. These diseases are mostly found in men and women who lives in cities
.
To conclude
, citizens living in the cities
are more prone to the health
disease. There are numerous factors that affect health
of communities, such
as their lifestyle, their eating and drinking habits and AQI value.Submitted by khushiaggarwal255 on
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task response
Develop your main points more fully and provide more specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow and organization of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and try to use more precise and varied language.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to grammar and sentence construction, particularly with tense consistency and subject-verb agreement.
Your opinion
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