Because of modern technology it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skills but other believe that handwriting is still an important skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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increasing so, many people have been using technology for typing words that

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many people think that

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is not important anymore.

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some people think that writing by hand

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still important.

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my own opinion.

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task response

The essay partially addresses the task by discussing the views on whether handwriting is necessary in the modern world. However, it could benefit from a clearer stance on the issue.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a basic logical structure and presents the main points effectively. However, the introduction and conclusion could be more explicit.

lexical resource

The essay demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary, but there is room for improvement in the use of academic language and collocations.

grammatical range

The essay displays a range of sentence structures, but there are errors in sentence formation, particularly with verb tenses.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Because of modern technology it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skills but other believe that handwriting is still an important skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many would argue that scientific research requires a degree of oversight from the relevant governmental authorities. In my opinion, properly handled, this is a sensible and necessary policy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?