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The diagrams represent information in Edmonton about transport and car use.

The diagrams represent information in Edmonton about transport and car use.
#diagrams #information #edmonton #transport #car
The illustrations give information about transport use in Edmonton and
people
's reasons for using the
car
 in
city
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the city
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.
Overall
,
most
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the most
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 used transport is
car
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a car
the car
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 and
used
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is used
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in
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by
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 forty-five per cent,
while
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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one
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are one
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 in ten and
most
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the most
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 popular reason for using
car
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a car
the car
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 is commuting to work. As can be seen from the table, 45% of travel was made by cars
whereas
 the light rail transit was used 35%. These two were the highest used transportation types
used
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by the
people
 of Edmonton. Bus and Taxi were both used 10% of the total travel which was much
lesser
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less
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 than the use of
car
 and rail
transportations
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transportation
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.
According to
 the table data, most
people
 travelled to commute to work and the percentage of it was 55. The send the highest percentage of
people
 travelled for the business purpose which was 10% less than the work commuting reason. For shopping and leisure
activity
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activities
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 15% of
people
 travelled and
to take
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taking
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 children to their school was another reason
people
 travelled which
occupies
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occupied
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 40% of their total travel.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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