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The supplied illustration describes the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

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The supplied illustration describes the process by which
bricks
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 are manufactured for the building industry. In general,
bricks
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 are made by machines and supervised by humans who control all the steps to avoid deformations and bugs,
furthermore
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,
this
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 manufactury is started with digging clay and is ended with delivering
bricks
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 to the shop. After
clay
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the clay
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is dig
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is dug
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 it is sifted by
metal
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the metal
a metal
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 grid to divide bigger chunks from smaller ones which fall on top of the roller,
afterwards
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 they are mixed with sand and water to create the structure of
a
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brick. Prior to moderating the moulded products comes step four or putting the
bricks
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 into
drying
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the drying
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 oven for twenty-four to forty-eight hours. When the dried
bricks
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 are cooled in the cooling chamber they are counted and packaged. Eventually, when the
bricks
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 are packaged and ready to be delivered, they are sent to the authorized sellers.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates to the main point being discussed.
coherence cohesion
Include a brief introduction that provides an overview of the process to be described, as well as a conclusion that summarizes the main points.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and precise terminology related to the process of brick manufacturing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Ensure that verb tenses are used correctly and that sentences are clear and well-structured.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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