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The flow chart illustrates the water cycle, which the continouns movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

The flow chart illustrates the water cycle, which the continouns movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
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The flow chart illustrates the
water
 cycle, which
the
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is the
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continouns
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continuous
 movement of
water
 on, above and below the
surface
 of the Earth.
Overall
, it is seven steps
clear
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illustarted
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illustrated
 in the
process
 commencing with
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the continoun
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continoun
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continuous
continuum
 of
water
 by
ocean
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the ocean
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 and could and ending with the
surface
 runoff.
To begin
 steps is when the snow on
mountain
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the mountain
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, proceed on the
surface
 of the runoff. After
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the stage
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stage
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stage,
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 the
imprevious
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previous
impervious
 layered after the
surface
 runoff.
At
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 the cycle, the
salt
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saltwater
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water
 intrusion
to
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into
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ocean
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the ocean
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. Over time, the ocean
contributing
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 about 80% of total
water
 vapour in
air
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the air
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this
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through this
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process
evaporation
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of evaporation
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.
Evaporation
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The evaporation
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process
 made from
water
 to
in
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air
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the air
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.
This
process
named
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 condensing
water
 to vapour.
As
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 the same time,
the
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they
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 begin condensing vapour
cloud
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clouds
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 so as to cloud formation. Eventally, by the cloud formation
althought
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although
 it precipitation raining to
lake
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the lake
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. Gradually, the
water
become
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to
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groundwater, ready to proceed
water
 onto
ground
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the ground
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. In general, the cycle
process
 which is the continuous movement of
water
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, surface, process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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