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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The maps show the significant development of Grange
park
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Park
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 from 1920 to today. At first glance,
it is clear that
 several facilities have been considerably upgraded under the trend of modernization. Notably, there has been an
overall
 rearrangement to meet the demand of people. In regard
to
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the middle of the
park
, a rose garden which
surrounded
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 by many seats has replaced the previous central fountain. To the left of the new garden, the old stage for musicians has been turned into a newly large amphitheatre.
Moreover
, the second rose garden and a pond on the right of the entrance were demolished to make space for a café and a
children’playground
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playground
 respectively. Turning to the bottom right corner of the
park
, the glasshouse has been redesigned with a water feature.
In addition
, a third entrance has been built, providing access to the new underground car
park
. The rest of the
park
remain
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 the same.
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