Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

In today's era, technology is doing wonders for
people
in every sector making the lives of
people
better and easier than ever. Most of the
work
areas nowadays are being governed by
the
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up-to-date machinery and automation.
Eventhough
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the implementation of modern tools and techniques
have
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revolutionised the old way of performing
work
in a positive manner,
but
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there are
also
some demerits that come along when we depend on it more than required. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss the
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To begin
with, before the advent of technology performing any task at
work
was a very
time consuming
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and tedious
job
. Advancements in the field of automation
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enabled humans to get their
job
done within a short moment of time, ranging from making an
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sheet to submitting an assignment.
Along with
this
most of the business meetings are now held through web conferencing by sitting at their homes, for which
people
have to travel thousands of miles in earlier times.
For instance
,
according to
a survey, after the implementation of modern tools and techniques in the working sector there has been a considerable decrease in the amount of time and effort needed for getting a
job
done opening a lot of
job
opportunities in
this
sector.
Furthermore
, as more and more
people
are making the most out of
the
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modern technology, they have ultimately become lazy as one can have the liberty of having anything with just a click of a button.
This
has a huge negative impact on the health of the
people
making them susceptible to diseases and
also
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the
avarage
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average
life span.
For example
,
according to
the Ministry of Health, after
introduction
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of modern automation
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there has been a shocking 35 per cent incline in the cases of obesity and
40
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per cent rise in the cases of cardiovascular diseases.
To sum up
,
though
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modern technological advancements are taking over most of the
work
sectors helping humans
in doing
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their intricate jobs very easily. Individuals ought not to forget the dark side that
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along with
this
and it's their responsibility to make the best out of it for themselves
as well as
for the workplace.
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