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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the treatment of
waste
products
 in three different
countries
, namely,
Republic
Correct article usage
the Republic
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 of
Korea
,
Sweden
 and
United
Correct article usage
the United
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 Kingdom.
Overall
,
waste
products
 are managed in five different ways, with recycling and burying underground being the most preferred
method
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methods
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 in some of the
countries
. In
Korea
, 69% of
waste
products
 are recycled,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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 the
UK
 does
no
Correct your spelling
not
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waste
products
 but
Sweden
 recycles more than
one third
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one-third
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 of
Korea
's
rate
. All
countries
 bury some of their
waste
products
 underground, with the
UK
 recording the highest
rate
 at a wildly 82% against
Sweden
's
rate
 of 55%.
Korea
 recorded a figure of 9% which is almost
one nineth
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one-ninth
 of
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the Uk's
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Uk's
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UK's
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rate
. In the incineration of refuse, all
countries
 used
such
method
Correct article usage
a method
show examples
, with the highest
rate
 recorded by
Sweden
 at 20%, which is more than twice as high as
Korea
's
rate
 but ten times the
rate
 of
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the Uk's
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Uk's
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UK's
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 figure.
Furthermore
, the
UK
 treats some of its garbage by using chemical treatment or dumping
at
Correct pronoun usage
it at
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 sea, a practice
that is
 not applied to the treatment of refuse in the two other
countries
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, products, countries, korea, sweden, uk, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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