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Pollution is becoming a major environment problem. What are causes and solutions to solve this problem?

#pollution #environment
Presently, there
are
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pollution around the world, which
lead
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 to
environment
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 problems.
For
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prespective
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perspective
, I believe that the main cause is the household which could solve it by using renewable energy. One of the main problems in
the
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most countries is pollution as there is an
incresing
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increasing
 in
number
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a number
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 of new
tecnologies
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technologies
 which
requires
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electric
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.
Moreover
,
household
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the household
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 is one of the
place
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which
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where
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 some individuals do not think that they use plenty of
electric
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 as they are not really at their house, but it uses numerous of
electric
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 without knowing.
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, the main resources for making
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requires
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numeros
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numerous
 of
fules
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files
fuels
 for every family to use for the whole day. Fuels could change to
be
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electric power by burning
it
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them
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,
whice
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which
cause
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causes
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the
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smoke and pollution. Even
it
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 burnt from one place,
but
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it could spread to the whole country so
eaily
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easily
early
.
This
 problem could
be solve
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for
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long
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 term by using
renemable
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renewable
 energy. The easiest way to do
is
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instrall
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install
instal
the
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solar panels in every household. It might
requires
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several
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 money, but the money will be back in the long term as it will
also
 reduce the electric bills
in
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each month.
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,
in
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some hot countries have the sun most of the
time
 , which could help to produce
electric
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 in
day
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the daytime
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time
 and save it for the
night
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nighttime
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time
 which can save
the
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money at the same
time
 as saving the world. In conclusion, people cause several problems to earth,
which
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including the population as numerous
of
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people just want
easy
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an easy
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 life, which mainly from the house and can be better by using renewable energy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution
  • environmental problem
  • causes
  • solutions
  • industrial emissions
  • vehicular emissions
  • improper waste disposal
  • deforestation
  • stricter environmental regulations
  • renewable energy sources
  • waste management systems
  • planting
  • trees
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