Working is taking a more important role in people's lives. Why are people working so much? Do you think this trend is good or bad?

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Working is
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part of people's
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. They always try to get a good job and
work
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for years.
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topic in both opinions. First of all, it is known that working takes part an important role in our
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. even we choose and decide what will be our dream job from childhood. it takes several steps like
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to
schools
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school
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,
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university and
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graduation and
work
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will be waiting for us. we
work
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because we want to gain experience and earn money. Both men and women try to get the best offer for their job. when they
work
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they can get what they want.
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result
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of working they can purchase different
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materials
material
thing
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things
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which can make their life much better. like
car
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cars
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,
house
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houses
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, clothes and several things like
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.
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of
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, people sometimes
work
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so much and it affects their
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on negative sides. even though they get
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salary
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they can not spend time with their families.
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as
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a result
first
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they become exhausted and unhappy as well. we all know that
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rich does not make
everyon
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everyone
thrilled.
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, some families get divorced because of
men's
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men
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working long hours. they claim that we can not spend time together and it
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a lack of commitment between couples. in conclusion, we know working is
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part of our
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. in my opinion, if people make
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a balance
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between
work
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and private life, it will make them on nine clouds.
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