In the recent times, the only way to see pieces of art or historical artefacts was by visiting public museums and galleries. Nowadays, people can admire them on the internet. In my opinion such places as galleries and museum should exist for finacial and enterteiment reasons.

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In the recent times, the only way to see pieces of

art

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or historical artefacts was by visiting public

museums

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and galleries. Nowadays, people can admire them on the internet. In my

opinion

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such

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places as galleries and

museum

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museums

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should exist for

finacial

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financial

and

enterteiment

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entertainment

reasons.

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with, using

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the internet

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internet

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is only possible to look at museum objects

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with

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the eye of the camera and

this

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metod

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method

can not give a full experience of sightseeing. Technological

items

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item's

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quality is not good

enought

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enough

to catch every

detial

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detail

of works of

art

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. Take my trip to

Louvre

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the Louvre

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for

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example, the famous Mona Lisa picture was quite different in real life than it was when I

had

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saw it online. In the

art

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gallery

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gallery,

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was able to see even the texture of paints, which

was enable

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to admire on the computer.

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of increase in the online

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museums

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museum

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visitors, the

art

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piecies

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pieces

piece

will become less impresing for people. In conclusion, the only way to fully enjoy

hisrorical

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historical

or artistic artefacts is by seeing them personally. Another reason for

museum

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museums

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and

art

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galleries to exist is to keep the

art

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piecies

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pieces

piece

in good condition. Objects that

quite

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old need good conservation to keep their beauty.

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visitors

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when visitors

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paying

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for

enter

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entry

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tickets,

the

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great amount of their money is used to clean and preserve paintings. Without

regullary

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regularly

regular

dusting and keeping them in the special glass box they will break down.

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without public

museums

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there could be not

enought

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enough

money to keep

art

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alive. To summarise, the

palce

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place

art

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gallieries

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galleries

museums

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give people full

expirience

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experience

of admiring

art

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and history.

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addition

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addition,

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seeing

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this

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these

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piecies

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pieces

personally are making able to keep them in the same condition for many years.

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