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The graph and table show the number of individuals’ working hours and the number of paid holidays from 1998 to 2004.

The graph and table show the number of individuals’ working hours and the number of paid holidays from 1998 to 2004.
The line graph illustrates
people
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’s working
hours
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 between 1999 and 2004,
while
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 the table depicts how many holidays with pay
people
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 enjoyed on average during the same period.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 working 16-31
hours
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 and 32-45
hours
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 experienced a rise, but fewer individuals worked more than 45
hours
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; meanwhile,
people
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 were entitled to more paid holidays. Regarding
people
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’s working time, in 1998, 10.5
million
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people
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 worked 32-45
hours
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 and
then
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 the
number
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 stabilised in the following year. The figure increased noticeably to just over 11
million
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 in 2004 after it had decreased slightly to approximately 10.4
million
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 in 2000.
Although
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 the initial
number
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 of
people
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 working 16-31
hours
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 was 10
million
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, it grew significantly by 2
million
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, overtaking that of
people
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 working 32-45
hours
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 in the middle of 1999 and reaching 12
million
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 in 2004.
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,
people
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 working more than 45
hours
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 had an all-time low
number
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, at 9.5
million
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 in the beginning and 9
million
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at the end
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, with some moderate fluctuations in between. Turning to the average
number
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 of paid holidays,
people
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 had 25
days
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 in 1998, 27
days
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 in 1999, and 29
days
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 in 2000, and the figure went up to 30
days
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 during the first two years of the 21st century. Luckily, workers got 32
days
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 in 2003 and 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, people, number, million, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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