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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppse it. Discuss both views and give you opinion

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The majority of
people
 think that
fruits
 and
vegetables
 have been used to
transport
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 by aircraft to some nations where
such
 plants hardy grow or out of season is a good idea,
while
 others say that it is not
neccessary
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necessary
. Though
fruits
 and
vegetables
 have been transported by planes becoming more convenient. I agree that it is becoming more expensive
due to
 the price of exportation. The main reason why
people
 say that carrying
vegetables
 or
fruits
 by
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 is a good idea is that it is increasingly convenient.
This
 is true because
transportation
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the transportation
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 of planes saving time to
ship
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shipping
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 or containers, all of which make
fruits
 arrive to
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the hand
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hand
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hands
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 of
user
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the user
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 still fresh.
For instance
, most of the best
food
 can be found around the world
athough
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although
 some countries can not grow or are out of season.
However
, I agree that transporting
they
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them
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 by
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 is not
neccessary
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necessary
as a result
 of the prices
are
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is
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 cost a
bumb
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bomb
bump
. By
this
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this,
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 I meant that
,
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apply
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 the cost of jet fuel when transported.
As a
result
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result,
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 the price of
vegetables
 and
food
 will be inflated very high, many
people
 will use that to profit for themselves and few residents have access to those goods. In conclusion, some
people
 state that transporting greens and
food
 by
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 makes
more
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it more
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 convenient.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion
that
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apply
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it is becoming unneccassary import
tô
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apply
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many products and support our country's
food
instead
.
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