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optiona a: atheletic track option b :baseball ground

#optiona #atheletic #track #option #b #baseball #ground
I prefer constructing the Baseball
ground
 would be a viable option .In
this
 respect,the Baseball
ground
 can be used for multipurpose games
. .
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Apparently, it will
also
 be the best place to increase the economy
. .
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 To start with,Baseball grounds are not often found in many Cities.Building
these kind
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 of grounds will not only
helps
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 those players but, it will
also
 be an
adavantage
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advantage
 for many other
Athelets
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Athletes
.One can use
this
ground
 to play Cricket and Football with minor adjustments. Another outcome is, it can be used to raise the money and that income can be used for welfare activities.To illustrate,the
playarea
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play area
 can
also
 be utilised as
open
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 auditorium to conduct the Sports and other Cultural events .
For instance
, nearby cities are using
thier
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their
 Cricket
ground
 as
venue
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 for Sportsfest which is attracting people
allover
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 the World.
Overall
,it can be said that there are more advantages than drawbacks. Again ,
this
 is my
personaly
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personal
personally
 view, I will support any decision taken by
local
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 government.I thank you for giving me the opportunity to express my views.
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