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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #focus #classroom #show #status #clothes #thebefore #school #uniforms
Nowadays many first-tier universities around the World establish different entrance examinations or educational Olympiads in order to access the best of the best
students
 to the courses.
Such
 practice has both pros and cons,
therefore
 all consequences in
this
 essay are explained and supported with examples.
Firstly
, there are two main disadvantages of one-time testing – the absence of motivation
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 the whole study course, except the session period, and stressful conditions that bring about
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 of
students
 who were
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 about the course. By discussing the first problem, bachelors become lazy and not interested in gaining knowledge because of the form of control that doesn’t push them to bury in the material.
In addition
, the fact that a person is to have
a
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one assessment
make
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 people anxious and inattentive.
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, I
study
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 intensively calculus in
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 first year at university,
many
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 tutors were proud of me and my desire to learn the hardest subject,
nevertheless
, I did not pass the exam because of anxiety.
Secondly
,
such
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 of assessment has some organizational and commercial benefits. No doubt, that a reservation of a lecture room and teaching stuff a half of a year is cheaper than more often.
For instance
, in Russian
University
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 «Higher
school
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 of
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» there are some disciplines that are to have
such
 a control system and
students
, who study in commercial form, can pay less in comparison with
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another subject
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 which
consist
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 of continual assessment. Taking everything into account, the
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 approach is insufficient and impractical because of a sharp decrease in
students
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students'
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 inspiration to research constantly and
it`s
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 anxiousness.
However
, it is not time-spending and requires low financial costs.
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear introduction and conclusion to the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your main points are well-supported with examples and explanations.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Review your grammar to avoid errors and improve sentence construction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic focus
  • fashion trends
  • peer pressure
  • social class disparities
  • disciplinary environment
  • cost-effective
  • school identity
  • sense of belonging
  • individual expression
  • dress codes
  • professional attire
  • body types
  • school spirit
  • creativity suppression
  • equal footing
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