Even more people are spending most of their time at work nowadays, which leaves almost nothing for personal life. Do you think this trend has more advantages o disadvantages for people?

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which is really important .
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it on your live ,
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that we have it is collecting money when you are young , my father when he was young he worked around 10 hours a day but now they don need
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self ,which is really vital
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self and have
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well-paing and
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  • workaholic
  • prioritize
  • overwhelmed
  • stressful
  • detrimental
  • compensation
  • promotion
  • fulfilled
  • workplace
  • colleagues
  • commitment
  • opportunities
  • interpersonal
  • well-being
  • exhaustion
  • stress
  • conflict
  • anxieties
  • leisure
  • hobbies
  • family
  • friends
  • flexibility
  • boundaries
  • self-care
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