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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#country #language #reason
Speaking a different
language
 from
country
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a country
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 that you live in may cause extreme social problems. In
this
statement
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 we will give you examples and reasons
in
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for
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 how
much
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apply
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difficult
use
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the use
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language
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of language
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 that
doesn’t
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isn’t
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 popular
is
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.  In the beginning, communication between people is by talking. So, everyone needs to
knows
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 the
language
 of his or her community. If anybody could not understand his environment
language
 he
will
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 suffer from bad contact. Meanwhile, during good
contact
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contact,
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 they can understand each other and make life easier.
For instance
, in 2018 my family went to Turkey when my father became sick and visited a doctor he
had
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 not
ability
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 to explain what he felt. Unfortunately, he died and my family situation was miserable. Because
this
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 state I decided when any time travel anywhere I must
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find
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translator
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a translator
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 or learn a foreign
country
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country's
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language
. In
concussion
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conclusion
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, talking
same
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the same
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language
 where you live in
country
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the country
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 makes life better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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