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The graph gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007

The graph gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007
#information #households #car #britain
The diagram illustrates the data of the people who used
car
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a car
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 for
house
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a house
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works
Verb problem
apply
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in great
britain
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Britain
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on
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apply
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between 1971
to
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and
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 2007 .
Overall
,
approximetly
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approximately
same
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the same
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 Amount of households used
the
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apply
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one
car
 for their household
works
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work
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over
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apply
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. the years .
highest
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the highest
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 number of people didn't use
car
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the car
a car
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 for their
dailly
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daily
 activities in 1971 , at nearly 50 on the other hand
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount
recorded
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was recorded
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 in
same
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the same
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 year which was around 2
persons
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people
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.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 Two
car
 uses are like
a
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an
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 upward line
graph
 and no
car
 used
peoples
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people
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downward
graph
 during the period so those two
graph
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graphs
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 are interset in 2003, at nearly 25
household
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households
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.
To begin
 with,
three
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the three
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 or more cars used
families
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by families
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 number are
incresing
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increasing
 from 1971 to 2007 but
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the incresing
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incresing
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increasing
 amount is low and that
graph
also
 upward
couver
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cover
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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