Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

Many

people

believe that

technologies

,

for

example

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mobile

phone

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phones

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, are making gaps in social interaction. I strongly disagree

about

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the statement because it can make

this

life easier by getting news faster,

as well as

becoming

entertaining

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tool and will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.

To begin

with, sophisticated

technologies

can help

people

get an easier life, especially a cell

phone

. Nowadays, thanks to the

smart

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smartphone

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phone

which can optimize the internet, a person can access a bunch of

information

within their hand. The

information

that they get through THE internet can be used as an

information

source in certain discussions.

Furthermore

, A mobile

phone

offers several

entertainments

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entertainment

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and high-tech specifications.

For example

,

people

who love photography and gaming (as their hobbies) will have bigger opportunities to join a community.

This

can be a tool to build social interactions.

From

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these two reasons,

a

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social interaction through

smart phones

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smartphones

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have

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became

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easier. Despite the mentioned benefits of cell

phone

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phones

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in

A

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previous paragraph,

technologies

can

also

be a threat to social

aspect

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aspects

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.

People

tend to waste their time just to play games with their

phone

. A survey said Indonesia ranked as

number

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one country- especially for

young

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the young

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generation -that

spend

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spends

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a lot of time on games. As

result

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a result

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, we will not have a desire to interact with the

surrounding

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surroundings

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.

In addition

, using phones can lead to particular health issues,

for

instance

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people

who are using mobile

phone

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phones

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within

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for

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a long period of time,

they

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apply

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will have

eyesore

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,

backache

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, and something their hand

will get

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tremor

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.

Thus

, health issues and social activities issues are the biggest

threat

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threats

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in

term

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terms

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of using phones. In conclusion, I disagree

if

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that

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technologies

can create gaps in social interaction among

people

.

Technologies

-specifically mobile

phone

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phones

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- have a lot of benefits

such

as it will help

people

to access

information

easily and

the

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apply

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sophisticated specification will help

people

to

fulfill

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fulfil

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their

hobby

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hobbies

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.

However

,

technologies

can affect

people

's health

condition

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conditions

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and

disturbing

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disturb

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their social activities.