Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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people

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believe that

technologies

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for

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mobile

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phone

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phones

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, are making gaps in social interaction. I strongly disagree

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the statement because it can make

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life easier by getting news faster,

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becoming

entertaining

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tool and will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.

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with, sophisticated

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can help

people

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get an easier life, especially a cell

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. Nowadays, thanks to the

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phone

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which can optimize the internet, a person can access a bunch of

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within their hand. The

information

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that they get through THE internet can be used as an

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source in certain discussions.

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, A mobile

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offers several

entertainments

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and high-tech specifications.

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people

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who love photography and gaming (as their hobbies) will have bigger opportunities to join a community.

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can be a tool to build social interactions.

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these two reasons,

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social interaction through

smart phones

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have

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became

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easier. Despite the mentioned benefits of cell

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phone

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phones

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previous paragraph,

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can

also

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be a threat to social

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tend to waste their time just to play games with their

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. A survey said Indonesia ranked as

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one country- especially for

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generation -that

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a lot of time on games. As

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, we will not have a desire to interact with the

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, using phones can lead to particular health issues,

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instance

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people

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who are using mobile

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phone

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phones

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within

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a long period of time,

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will have

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, health issues and social activities issues are the biggest

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term

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of using phones. In conclusion, I disagree

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technologies

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can create gaps in social interaction among

people

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-specifically mobile

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phone

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phones

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- have a lot of benefits

such

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as it will help

people

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to access

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easily and

the

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sophisticated specification will help

people

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fulfill

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their

hobby

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hobbies

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technologies

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can affect

people

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's health

condition

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and

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their social activities.

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