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The graphs shows the annual income of language-related jobs in US dollars in five cities.

The graphs shows the annual income of language-related jobs in US dollars in five cities.
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The bar graph illustrates the
earnings
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 of three languages-related works-interpreter,
translator
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, and
language
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teacher-in
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teacher
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 every year in five places, namely Mexico, Dubai, Paris, Munich, and
Toronto
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.
Overall
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,
Toronto
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 has the highest
earnings
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, and it is dominated by interpreter work.
On the other hand
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, Mexico has the lowest income among the cities with
similar
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number
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 of
earning
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earnings
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 in each job.
Firstly
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,
Toronto
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experiences
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 the highest annual income among the five places. Similar
with
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 Munich, the interpreter job in
Toronto
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 reaches the biggest
number
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 of
earning
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earnings
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 with more than $70,000. The annual earning has a slight decrease to approximately $65,000 for the
translator
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 and
language
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 teacher works.
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, in Munich and Dubai, the
translator
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 and
language
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 teacher have a
number
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 of income more than $60,000 every year.
In contrast
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, the
language
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 teachers in Paris get less
earnings
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 around $45,0000 compared to
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translator
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translators
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 and
interpreter
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interpreters
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 which have a moderate rise to more than $60,000.
Lastly
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, Mexico gets the lowest
earnings
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in
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compared to the other four cities. There are similar
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number
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numbers
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 of annual incomes in three categories, which are around $19,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, translator, language, toronto, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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