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in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend sums of money on the construction of new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. other believe that money should be spent on improving existing public transport

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There is an ongoing argument between individuals about spending a large amount of money on building new
railway
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lines
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 extensively between cities or whether it is better to refine the current public
transport
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. I believe that
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 some
towns
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 never have a
railway
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, they have significant potential to attract tourists and
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, advanced
transport
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 is a source of national income. On the one hand, allocating the budget for the current public
transport
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 can lead to substantial achievement because it deals with daily life and people always make use of it. If public
transport
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 provides extensive services persistently, people will reach their workplaces on time and it enhances the quality of
transport
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.
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, in my city, which is cosmopolitan and where life hinges on public
transport
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, I usually stand in long
lines
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 to get on the subway, and refining the existing
lines
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 will have a long-term impact on social well-being.
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, many
towns
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 never had a
railway
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 and by investing money to construct new railways, the
government
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 can spend a part of its income to improve the current public
transport
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.
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, some small
towns
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 have many exquisite popular resorts and are capable of attracting many tourists, and
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 poor
transport
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, they have the slight power to prepare facilities for
travelers
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. If the
government
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 constructs new railways in these areas, many job opportunities will be created,
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, they can generate income for the
government
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 to make the existing public
transport
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 better.
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, my hometown is an old city which is of paramount importance on the ground that it has many ancient sites. Making new
railway
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lines
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 in that area will develop the service industry which bring about an economic upturn there.
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, I believe that the
government
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 not only follows through with a plan for big cities but
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 small
towns
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 are a matter of concern for its citizens. In conclusion, refining current public
transport
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 is the main priority and the
government
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 should figure out solutions
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 building new
lines
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 for very fast trains between cities can boost the local economy and industries.

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Your opinion

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