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You are currently attending a course which is not the same as per the description in the admission brochure. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter, state which course you are enrolled in provide details about the noted differences suggest what actions would you like him to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

#course #description #admission #brochure #headmaster #differences #actions #addresses
Dear Dave Peter, The very purpose of writing
this
 letter is about the current
course
 which is different
than
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 the information given in the admission pamphlet. Having a keen interest in engineering since childhood, I chose to study in an Architectural Technician
course
 but as soon as I entered the lecture I got to know that it was a different
course
 than I imagined. The lecture introduced the
course
 on Civil Engineering, which I was not able to understand. There are a number of differences between both of the courses. Being an Auto-Cad software user, I know that my
course
 would contain lessons about my previous study
such
 as layouts, 3D maps, and additional software.
However
, it contains information about only the concrete types, drafting, and measuring. I
therefore
 request that you take the necessary steps to provide me with a full refund for my
course
 and provide relevant information about the courses on your advertising pages. Yours Faithfully, Ishan
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coherence cohesion
Expand on the reasons for choosing the Architectural Technician course and explain how the differences have affected your learning experience.
coherence cohesion
Provide specific examples of the differences between the two courses and how they have affected your understanding.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your thoughts and opinions.
grammatical range
Demonstrate a stronger command of grammatical structures and sentence variety.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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