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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city via three means of communication, between January and
June
 in 2011.
It is clear that
 visitors to the city made more
inquires
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 in
person
 and via
telephone
,
while
 written letters and
emails
 became the least common choices.
Additionally
, the
number
 of enquiries in
person
 experienced the most dramatic change among the different options. In January, the Tourist Information Office received 900
telephone
 enquiries,
while
 just under 800 letters and
emails
 were received. Not many tourists chose to ask for information in
person
, with just over 400 queries. Over the next three months, the
telephone
 still remained the most popular method of enquiry,
at
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 approximately 1000 queries. Meanwhile, the
number
 of
enquires
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 made in
person
 saw considerable growth to 800, surpassing the figures for
emails
 and postal
enquires
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. From March to
June
,
enquires
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enquiries
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 in
person
 were the most common method of inquiry. By
June
, the
number
 of
in
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person
enquires
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 soared by more than 1,000 to peak at 1,900. During
this
 period, there was
also
 a significant rise in the figure for
telephone
 enquiries, from 1000 to 1600.
By contrast
, fewer people sent
emails
 or letters to make
enquires
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, with slightly less than 400
enquires
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 in May and
June
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, june, person, telephone, emails, enquires with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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