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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students' attidutes are important . Discuss both views and give your opinions .

#people #success #teachers #students #attidutes
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Most of
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 it is open to debate that learners' improvement
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 on educators. Many people support
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 some decline about
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 issue.
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 there are arguments on both
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, I strongly believe that
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attidutes
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attitudes
attributes
 are extremely important.  First and foremost, opponents think teachers'
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 are very vital in
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 issue. They motivate and teach a learning path to
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 which
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successful
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 results for them.
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 some
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 always need to be shown a way and support for learning something. They barely do something
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 and never make
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 to gain
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 educational information. in
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 role in learners lives and because of
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students
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 get used to learning. 
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, some pupils and
students
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 have a strong
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for learning
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. They do not need someone
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 important steps in their educational way. Both teachers and parents just
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 moral support for them.
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, they know how to use sources and libraries for their development. if someone tries and works hard, he/she gets success as soon as possible. Many
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 and they burn the midnight oil.
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 they get successful victories.  in conclusion,
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 everyone is
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responsible
 for their improvement.
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students
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 should always know how to learn.
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Increase the range of vocabulary used and use more precise and appropriate words.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structures and grammar usage, especially subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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