Organized tours to remote places and communities are increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for local people and the environment?
Management tour to rural places and community is rising significantly.
This
essay would argue that despite this
development can bring
a detrimental effect on the environment, many Verb problem
having
positives
impacts on the local citizens and environment on the grounds that they can boost Change the noun form
positive
Correct article usage
the economic
economic
and get an opportunity Replace the word
economy
of learning
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to learn
new
language.
On the one hand, when holiday-makers flog to a tourist attraction, they may ruin some places. Add an article
a new
For example
, in Indonesia, many tourists have visited temples such
as Borobudur tempel
, Change the capitalization
Tempel
have
Wrong verb form
which has
solen
many stupas and Correct your spelling
sold
any
other ancient things. Correct quantifier usage
apply
This
also
happen
in Thailand, many Change the verb form
happens
tourist
who have explored sub-marine life, sometimes Change to a plural noun
tourists
have ruined
many Wrong verb form
ruin
magnificient
creatures in the sea. Correct your spelling
magnificent
As a result
, our next generation may not to
be able to see these Change the verb form
apply
magnificient
things.
Correct your spelling
magnificent
On the other hand
, many visitors who flog to the local places may grow Correct article usage
the economic
economic
of the local Replace the word
economy
people
. For instance
, when tourists visit Bali, they can buy local food, use local transportation, sleep
in the local’s Correct word choice
and sleep
house
. Fix the agreement mistake
houses
As a result
, people
can receive much more money from tourists and this
can boost local peoples’ economic
. Replace the word
economy
In addition
, the visitors not only bring impact on economic
but Replace the word
economy
also
local people
can learn new languages from travellers. By
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This
this
can improve their relationship skills.
In conclusion, this
essay thinks that in spite of a
negative Correct article usage
the
effect
on the place, Fix the agreement mistake
effects
but
they bring more positive impacts because they can increase local Correct word choice
apply
people
Change noun form
people's
live
economically and local citizens can learn new Replace the word
lives
language
.Fix the agreement mistake
languages
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