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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good member of the society.Others,however believe that school is the best place to learn this.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People in the country think that
children
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 should behave like
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good
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member
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members
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 of
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society
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Parents
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 send their
children
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school to learn how to react like a good
member
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parents
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 should teach their
children
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 how to behave in
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society
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 and some believe that
education
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 place is a good way to learn. Some people believe that
parents
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 should teach their
children
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 to behave like a good
member
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. Here
parents
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 play a vital role in teaching how to behave
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 good citizens.It is too easy to make their
children
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 glow soon.
Parents
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 need to some steps to teach their
children
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Parents
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 have a major response to structure their wards for
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.We have to start
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 early stage to make their wards
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be
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good
citizen
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citizens
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,they can teach them by telling stories
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about good
citizen
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citizens
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 in reality as role
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, some think that
education
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 best place to learn
this
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Education
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 teaches
children
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 how to behave in
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society
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 basic manner. Some
community
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communities
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 believe that going to school,colleges etc will gain knowledge about how to behave in
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society
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. We the
parents
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 should send them to the
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education
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insitution
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institution
 for
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 better experience to
became
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 a good
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member
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in
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society
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. We
conclued
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conclude
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 that it better that
parents
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should
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teach their
children
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 how to behave in
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society
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other
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rather
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 than sending them to
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education
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insititution
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institution
institutions
.We the
children
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 should grow up to achieve our mission as each individual has.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • moral values
  • social norms
  • structured environment
  • cooperation
  • respect
  • communal responsibilities
  • decision-making
  • societal integration
  • consistent messages
  • cultural expectations
  • complementary roles
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