There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: •Say what would you do differently than last year • Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year • Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

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Dear Miss. Kaur,
Greeting
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of the day! Through
this
missive, I would like to discuss
about
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my opinion related to the work event, which is held on
upcoming
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the upcoming
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year
. The main point of writing
this
letter is to describe the new activity which we are going to add next
year
. We are planning to play musical
chair
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chairs
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in
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at
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the party which we did not
played
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last
year
,
due to
this
people will enjoy
and
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themselves and
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also
forget the work stress.
Last
year
party
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the party
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was up to the mark but, the decoration was not satisfactory,
staff
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the staff
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expected a lot from us
however
, next
year
we will arrange
some
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for some
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new interior designer to
bauble
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build
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the hall. Could you please meet me in the coffee shop which is near the admin office at 5 pm,
In addition
to
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, we can arrange and discuss
further
related to the function. I will see you soon at
coffee
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the coffee
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shop. Yours sincerely, Jyoti
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Ensure that all the required information and tasks from the prompt are addressed in your letter.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your letter, making sure that the ideas flow smoothly and are well organized.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and precise words to enhance your writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your grammar and sentence structure, ensuring that there are no errors.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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