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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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More and more
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 prefer to
travel
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 by plane,
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, resulting in a big increase in
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travel
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 globally.
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 summarize, why, in my opinion, it is a negative development. Some of the most common reasons for increased
air
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 travelling are the convenience and low cost that it may provide. Unlike other means of transportation, it is possible to
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 long distances in shorter periods of time with more comfortable facilities and customer service. Many airlines have added new
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 destinations in the
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 decade, making it possible for
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 to reach new locations, that would be,
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, out of reach. There are different price categories as well, and individuals can customize their trip and find very low-cost tickets. All of
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 has increased
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travel
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. Despite the obvious appeal, travelling by plane is extremely non-environmentally friendly since it causes noise pollution, and emits ozone emissions, which together, accelerate global warming.
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, airports around the world use dramatic amounts of jet fuel.
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, passengers' carbon footprint is enormous, and compared to other travelling methods, those are way more sustainable, since
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 have not yet created aeroplanes that would run on electricity.
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 travelling costs on planes are relatively low and budget-friendly, they are still higher than on buses and trains.
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 can generate inequality between different social groups since
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travel
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 still remains more popular among wealthy
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.
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, there are a few reasons for increased travelling by
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, and those are the convenience
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 the low price, which attract more
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 annually.
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, in my opinion, compared to other means of transportation, aviation remains harmful to our environment
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 generates inequality between
people
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 with different social statuses and incomes.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific main idea and is logically connected to the overall argument.
task achievement
Expand on your ideas and provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
lexical resource
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and incorporate more academic or formal language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar, particularly in complex sentence construction.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aviation industry
  • global economy
  • business travel
  • international tourism
  • budget airlines
  • airfare
  • book flights
  • expatriate communities
  • global living trends
  • convenience
  • efficient aircraft
  • economic growth
  • travel accessibility
  • explore destinations
  • spontaneous trips
  • planned trips
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