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Many people believe children should begin learning a foreign language in primary school instead of secondary school. Do you think the advantages of learning a foreign language in primary school outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people insist that learning
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 second
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children
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 development, which is
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 school, is beneficial to them. Personally, I look at the bright side to the positive impact it makes on the students.
Therefore
, two perspectives of mine will be illustrated in the following paragraph. First of all, learning everything in a much faster way,
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schoolchildren at
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 age are able to learn foreign languages with
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 obstacles. A worth noting feature, which is opposite to us, is that the kids learn everything by experience.
That is
, they build up strong intertwinement between foreign
language
 and their real-life experience painlessly.
On the contrary
, if the
children
 miss
this
 golden period to develop
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foreign
language
 skills, they will start getting used to
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rigid
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 taught by their teacher.
Subsequently
, they will lose their interest when memorizing the vocabulary and grammar, bolstering their detrimental feeling about learning a foreign
language
. Though combining
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 second
language
 with the primary school climate can motivate them to utter
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language
 they are unfamiliar,
however
, having no self-driving purpose of learning,
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children
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 young age might make them lose their patient. A vivid case in point is that, the reason why most Taiwanese
children
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 English is not their own willingness.
Instead
, they just follow their parents’ instructions.
Therefore
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secondary school, with
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 learning another
language
. In conclusion, despite the aforementioned problem concerning the
children
’s motivation, I still assert that the education related to foreign
language
 should begin as early as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Pronunciation
  • Fluency
  • Brain plasticity
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Proficiency
  • Educational opportunities
  • Motivation
  • Resource constraints
  • Specialized teachers
  • Academic pressure
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum balance
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