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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low- cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people have been complaining recently about the noise resulting from increased air traffic and
airports
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airport
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 buildings
ocuppying
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occupying
 more and more space. Some individuals suggest that low-cost flights especially to
totourist
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to tourist
tourist
 destinations should be taxed more. I am not sure it will solve the problem. Increased taxation will involve
increase
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 in prices. Tickets will become more expensive but people will still want to go on holiday regardless of the ticket prices, a holiday is a holiday after all and it is not an everyday
expence
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expense
experience
. In my
opinion
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this
 measure is not likely to reduce air traffic and the amount of noise will hardly go down.
On the other hand
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such
 action on the part of the government might activate social unrest and have
high risk
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 political consequences There is
however
 another option. Governments might encourage research in air
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craft
 building , especially in developing better engines,
wfich
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which
 will surely result in noise reduction and
as a consequence
, people complaining less.
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task response
Ensure that the essay clearly addresses all aspects of the prompt and presents a well-rounded argument. Make sure to address the potential consequences of increased taxation on air travel.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization and structure of the essay. Consider using paragraph breaks to separate different ideas, and ensure a clear introduction and conclusion are present.
lexical resource
Vary your vocabulary and use more precise and sophisticated language. Expand your range of expressions to enhance the quality of the essay.
grammatical range
Work on improving your grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use more complex sentence structures.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air traffic
  • noise pollution
  • airport construction
  • environmental damage
  • low-cost passenger flights
  • affordability of air travel
  • taxing
  • reduce
  • growth
  • implementing
  • alternative measures
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