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The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart represents information about the most
of
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pupolar
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popular
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 modes of transport in
European
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Europe
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 that people were used to travelling to
went
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 to work in 1950,1970 and 1990.
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 seen that in 1950 and 1990 the highest were foot and car respectively. And the proportion in 1970 was not much
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 1950,
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most
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people
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used foot at 39
percent
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. Followed by bike and bus at 29
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percent
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 and 19
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percent
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 respectively. But the lowest in
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car
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 at only 5 %.
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, in 1990, the highest was car at 38
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.Followed by bus was 16
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, foot and bike were only 7% and 5% respectively. In 1970. the highest of
transportaion
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transportation
 was
bus
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a bus
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 at 26
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percent
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, and all
mode
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modes
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 of transport
were
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was
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 less than 30
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percent
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
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