In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

How did you find
about
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it? -I found
this
from
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on
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the Internet when I
decide
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decided
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to study
in
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this
college
. Which other colleges/universities have you considered? -I have considered
much
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many universities
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University
such
as
University
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the University
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of Cambridge, Imperial
College
London,
University
College
London,
University
of Bristol and many more but I think
this
college
is more suitable for me. Where is the
college
/
university
? -
This
University
located
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is located
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in the Central Belt Scotland in England and
also
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is also
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famous for
his
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its
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Sporting Excellence. Do you know anyone who has already studied there? -No, I don’t know anyone who has already studied there. Do you know roughly how large the
college
/
university
is? -I do not
have remembered
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exact
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the exact
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figure
about
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it
was
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around 360 acres in size with
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an innovation
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innovation
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Park and Dementia Centre. Why did you choose
this
course and how does it relate to your previous study? -I have chosen
this
course because, I think it is
very
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the very
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interesting course for me.
Furthermore
, I have work more than 10 years of experience
this
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in this
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field where I have built a strong team, put my
creativity
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creative
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ideas and
also
increase
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revenue
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the revenue
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of my company.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadened horizons
  • valuable life experiences
  • personal growth and development
  • engaging with different cultures
  • overcoming challenges
  • acquiring new skills
  • maturity
  • self-awareness
  • work experience
  • employment prospects
  • academic momentum
  • re-adjust
  • study habits
  • academic performance
  • financial aspect
  • pursuing certain activities
  • financial strain
  • university tuition
  • living expenses
  • perceived delay
  • inadequacy
  • anxiety
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