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The graph below shows that the percentage of Austra export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the percentage of Austra export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart illustrates the proportion of Australian
export
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exports
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 to four countries
such
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 as Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and India from 1990 to 2012. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that total
export
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exports
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 to India and
China
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 rose,
whereas
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 US and Japanese exports declined. By the end of the period, Chinese
export
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exports
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 had become most common by
overtaken
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 Japanese, American and Indian ones. Regarding
to
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Japan it started with the highest
rates
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rate
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 of 30% and
then
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 sharply declined over the next five years, following
the
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 downward trend until 2010 it finished at
near
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 17%.
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,
China
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 begins with 3% and the figures rose gradually before
it
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sharp
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grow
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grew
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 in 2005,
finally
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 the numbers reached
it
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 peak of 28%. The data for the United States had developed in a fluctual dynamic, showing the highest rates of 11% and it declined and recovered slightly with
negligible
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a negligible
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 rise of 7%. As for
India
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India,
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 it started
in
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at
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 a similar pace
with
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to
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China
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,
then
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 gradually increased and declined
in
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at
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 the end of the period with numbers lower than
USA
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the USA
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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