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Band 3.5

Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position

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There is no doubt that
ecomoic
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economic
 stability is important for every country.
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 some people believe that
the
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each country should
be independently handle
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 the
ecomic
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economic
 downturn rather than helping others
but
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apply
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others
argu
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argue
argued
 that
the
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each
others
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 should
support
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 for economic crisis. I will explain in
this
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on
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my
support
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 for the latter view. Every country has their own resources. Using the resources to
support
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 each other will make
a changes
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 in
the
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bilateral trading and economic stability.
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, Persian Gulf
Countries
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 are
oil rich
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 and India has
high
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 amount of agriculture production. If they
support
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 each other to reduce the prices for oil and food
materils
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materials
, the
logestic
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logistic
logistics
 cost will drastically reduce and help to provide
foods
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 for needs, Which will
beneficial
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 for both sides.
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, there will be
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responsiblity
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responsibility
 to
support
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 the
countries
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 who
has
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economic
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an economic
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 downturn.
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 considering the humanitarian issues, the
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countries
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country's
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 stability is more important to
provide
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the
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healthy foods and education for the students. Several United Nations agencies are working
by
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 the aid of the member
countries
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. If these aids are stopped, several
part
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 of the world will be in crisis. In conclusion, the utilization and exchange of
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the
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resources are will help to recover from the
ecomomic
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economic
 crisis,
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 the aid
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from
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form
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from
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the
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develped
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developed
countries
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also
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 important to provide aid for needy
poeple
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people
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