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Some countries encourage foreign companies to open in their country. Many people think the government should focus on encouraging local business rather than foreign businesses. To what extent do you agree?

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 world.Many countries open the way for foreign companies to do
business
 with them. Some masses think higher authorities should focus on improving or giving more
opportunities
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local
business
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 in place of foreign countries. In my
opinion
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 agree with the latter one. To commence with,
firstly
, the local
business
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 to the economic growth and sustainability of the
country
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secondly
,local
business
 plays
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 role in creating a sense of community and social cohesion.
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, people who
doing
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business
in
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exporting cotton from one state to another state and get that
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 which they don't have
this
 balancing the situation and making good relations socially
as well as
 economically. On the flip side, foreign companies bring investment and job
opportunities
 to the
country
.
moreover
, foreign companies can bring new technology and expertise to the
country
.
for
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 instance, foreign countries give us more job
opportunities
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leave
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at
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 new place and know their custom and culture but
due to
this
 many people
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 able to come back
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 their own
country
 because they become habitual to the environment and culture of the foreign
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least, higher authorities should take measures to make
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 balance between local businesses and foreign investors.
However
,
government
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 should give more
opportunities
 to local people in order to make them socially strong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • foreign companies
  • local business
  • government policies
  • investment
  • job opportunities
  • economic growth
  • sustainability
  • balance
  • attract
  • challenge
  • compete
  • large corporations
  • national identity
  • cultural heritage
  • technology
  • expertise
  • incentives
  • support
  • community
  • social cohesion
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