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In some countries, people these days spend very little time with their children. What are the causes of this? Whom does this affect more, parents or children?

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There is no denying the fact that
parents
recently
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are spending less time with their
children
 compared to the past years, in
this
 essay we are going to discuss the causes that might be happening as an impact of
this
 act,
also
 we will
also
 explain the effect on
parents
 and
children
.
To begin
 with, we should not lose sight of the fact that
parents
 play an outstanding role in their
children
's lives,
in other words
, we could say that
parents
 being around their
children
 is always going to be an essential part of their
children
's life's, and because of that, not being always there for them is going to cause a decrease in
children
 performance in life,
as well as
 their productivity. Another point to be taken into consideration, who is going to have the worst effect when
parents
not
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 stay with their
children
 long time,
according to
 a social study was published in the Wall Street Journalist in twenty-firs of October twenty hundred
and
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nine, which was entitled "The Worst
Children
", the study results concluded that if you want to have the worst child ever, you just need to ignore him all the time, and do not stay with him too much, and with that being saying, it is leading us to a conclusion that
children
 are going to have a huge affect comparing to their
parents
. In conclusion, people have recently found various ways in order to help families
to
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become more helpful to each other, so we just need to take it series and search for these ways.
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