Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season some people consider it a good idea, some are not. Discuss both views and give your opinion

A controversial discussion point is whether
fruit
and
vegetables
should be transported by
aircraft
to
others
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other
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countries
that hardly grow or
out
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are out
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of season. I contended that the
export
will ensure
food
needs and support
economic
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the economic
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development of agricultural
countries
contributing to
reduce
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reducing
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inflation
and inventory situation, despite those who believe that it
costs
a lot of money during transport and
susceptible
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is susceptible
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to damage from spoiled
food
with preservation
costs
. It must be acknowledged that
fruit
and
vegetables
is
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are
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two
kind
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kinds
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of
food
that
vital
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are vital
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with
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human’s
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life because of their benefits
with
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health and the improvement of
body
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. Extensive research has consistently shown that exporting
is handle
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handles
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the problem of wasting
food
is
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that
it
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apply
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cannot be sold,
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and support
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support
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supports
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farmers and agricultural
countries
develop
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in developing
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their
economic
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economies
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. By implementing an
export
, governments can avoid
food
shortages in the country,
simultaneously
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and simultaneously
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contribute
in decrease
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to decreasing
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inflation
. In 2019, there were estimated to be more than thousands of
farmer
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farmers
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loss
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losses
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while
some
countries
near that do not have
fruit
and
vegetable
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vegetables
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to sell because of
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the Covid-19
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Covid-19
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COVID-19
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pandemic.
Thus
, the
necessity
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to enhancement the
economic
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economy
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and
assure
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ensure
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food
needs.
However
, critics
justifying
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that
use
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the use
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aircraft
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of aircraft
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to transport
fruit
and
vegetables
costs
too much
and
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apply
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need
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needs
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a lot of money in preservation and
susceptible
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is susceptible
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to damage from spoiled
food
per
a
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apply
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shipment. They argue that
use
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aircraft
need to pay many sort of tax and circulation fee,
that
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which
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sometimes
costs
more than the income of
export
,
while
they can have risks if that
food
was
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is
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not preserved right and make a shipment spoiled.
This
is a credible point, but people can preserve their
fruit
and
vegetables
in
freezer
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the freezer
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compartment or in
the
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an
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environment
that
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with that
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high concentration of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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.
Consequently
,
these resolve
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can enhance the quality of
food
but not prices much, suitable for poor
countries
and friendly
with
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to
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environment
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the environment
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. The writer’s opinion advocates that
use
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the use
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aircraft
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of aircraft
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to transport
food
can reduce
inflation
and inventory situation.
In other words
,
food
is very difficult to preserve, and if the country has too much in a type of fruits and
vegetables
, the prices will be decreased,
whereas
others
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apply
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have
short
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shortage
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of fruits will make the prices
increased
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can
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and can
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causes
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cause
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unequal
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in
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apply
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economic
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economy
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.
As a result
, it can waste
food
, make the environment
be
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polluted and
rise
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raise
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the ability in
inflation
.
While
critics argue that
use
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the use
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aircraft
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of aircraft
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is
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costs
a lot of money and should
be restrict
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, proponents including myself emphasize that has many benefits with the development of a country that
depend
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on husbandry.
Therefore
, it should have been shown that
export
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exports
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play an important role in
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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and should be banned.
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