IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3

The map demonstrates changes between 1983 and 2010.

#changes
The diagram displays a countryside town as it was in 1983 and what it has become now.
Overall
, the countryside enlarged his territory and enhanced
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
show examples
 a number of places.
To begin
 with, the number of houses in the western part of the town has increased dramatically cutting the forest territory and building additional
road
Fix the agreement mistake
roads
show examples
 for them. The Police station, post office, and school did not change location and has not enlarged since 1983. The
Windmall
Correct your spelling
Windmill
 on the south side of the city has not moved or destroyed.
Also
, at the beginning of the river in the north part, there is a huge Dam constructed after 1983. On the other part of the map, there are huge improvements have been made since 1983. A small shop located on the north side of the main road was annihilated or removed to a big supermarket. On Munster road, on a place with a farm with animal
foodstuck
Correct your spelling
food stuck
, there appeared a petrol station and a small café.
Submitted by filwayy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: