the chart below shows the different levels of post-schools qualifications in Australia and the porportion of men and wemen who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.

the chart below shows the different levels of post-schools qualifications in Australia and the porportion of men and wemen who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.
The following bar chart compares various levels of post-school qualifications in both genders during 1999 in Australia.
Overall
, most men were qualified
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vocational
diploma
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while
the highest percentage of women were educated
in
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undergraduate
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diploma
. A striking
difference
between the percentage rate was noticed in vocational
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among males and females, reaching almost 100% and just above 10% respectively.
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, the education
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upon
postgraduate
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diploma
and master's
degree
followed the same trend, as men had the highest proportion (70%). The same pattern was followed by master's
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, but with
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bigger
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between
male
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and
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, 60% and 40% respectively. In undergraduate
diploma
and bachelor's
degree
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however
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women seemed to be educated twice as % men, 70% and 35%. In bachelor's
degree
meanwhile,
it
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had the smallest
difference
from all other post-school
qualification
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qualifications
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, regarding
to
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gender types, as the
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reaching well above 50%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, difference, degree with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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